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can't you see,
don't you see me
it's not my fault, i swear.
wont you help
you could help me,
show me that you care.
don't you hear,
can't you hear me
when i truthfully try to say
i'm sorry,
truly sorry,
if í have hurt you in any way.
but no, you refuse to see
just the effect you have on me
open your eyes
feels like your fate is tied to mine
to me

now desperately you try
to push me out of the dark
hearts and souls verse egos and minds
should and could confused with can't.

but sinking your own boat to save mine is futile
because we're on the same damn ship.
haha, um, yeah.....
tell me what you think.
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:iconhinatasangel13:
hinatasangel13 Apr 27, 2010   Writer
Lovely twist to the ending
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:iconyosuhara:
At first, just title caught my attention... then, when I red it... I realised it's TOTAL +fav to me...this poem express the exact feeling I am going through right now.. thanks
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:iconcinty-insanity:
oh, thankyou for the +fave!!
i'm glad you like it :D
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Relic-Angel Dec 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Nice! You have a way with words, except you forgot to put the first letters in capitals.
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:iconcinty-insanity:
haha, thanx...
yeah, im kind of lazy about that. i really need to start getting into the habit of using capitals and stuff...
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Relic-Angel Dec 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
You should. Then your poetry will sound better.
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Relic-Angel Dec 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ Then do your best.
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