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You're beautiful, you know.
Even though you won't see it
Because pride is unbecoming
(not to mention a deadly sin
But you don't concern yourself
With
trifles.)

You're incredibly bright, you know,
You need to forget about your shadows,
Seeping from beneath locked doors.
They're really just
Trifles
Compared to the rainbow
That glistens beneath your skin.

You're too sweet, you know.
Your goofy grin holds
More sugar than can be healthy
Don't worry, though,
I've got a sweet tooth.
Pity I can't afford to pay
For filling in all the cavities you'll leave
In my hea-
I mean,
Teeth.

You're strong, you know.
Unafraid to jump in mud puddles or
Change lives or other
Trifles
That make my day
Smile;
Every day.

You've make your mark:
Solid and dark. It's more than
Trivial
To me. (It's on me - )
But then again
I'm not exactly
A factor in your success-o-meter
Just a trifle.

I love you, you know.
But nobody is more ignorant than you
When it comes to enjoying the little things,
Even if the little things
Matter less than ladybugs, but -
I'd like to know if you consider me
A lucky charm;
Or below your consideration.
(You don't concern yourself
With
Trifles.)


You are my world, you know.

I know,
Trivial.
Right?
I was gonna call it 'Trifles'
But it sounded too yummy.
So -
Criticism??
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bookjunkie2 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2010
I read this while videochatting with a good friend, and I immediately read it out loud to her. It was so touching, we both just stopped and stared at each other for a moment. It's truly beautiful, and your word choice is so perfect, and conveys the emotion so well. This is incredible. (:
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cinty-insanity Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2010
Awww, thanks :aww: I'm glad you enjoyed it (:
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DovePoet Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh, definitely a favourite from me! This is so pretty...
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amber-rayin Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010
faved....
(that is my criticism) :P
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cinty-insanity Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010
Thanks muchly!!
Have a llama for your troubles :)
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Daviddno Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010
Absolutely amazing.
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cinty-insanity Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010
Thank-you :heart:
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lipizzan Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010  Student Writer
Absolutely beautiful.
I see two very different emotions (disdain, love) blending together. It's unusual and completely memorable. :heart:
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cinty-insanity Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010
Thankyou :) That's how I intended it to be, it's nice knowing people noticed ^^
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lipizzan Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010  Student Writer
Not a problem, you deserved the fave. Also, thanks for the llama! :)
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